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| core said 1633 days ago (May 21st, 2005) | |
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Thinking about taking it down This piece has been played for 18 times so far and it was downloaded once. It's been up for five days, yet no one has rated it yet or left a comment. It's disappointing to me since I hoped I would at least get some comments. Not even the 1-bomber has found it worth to apply his usual voting force of fake accounts. If the piece doesn't get a rating or comment within the next two days I'll take it offline. There's no point to keep it up for longer than a week without getting any reaction. Check out my latest song called Skeleton
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| bwhite said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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Thinking about taking it down Don't get discouraged. People probably don't know what to say. Congratulations on trying to create something new and stretching in a new direction. I would like to encourage you to take this passion and work to increase your compositional skills in this genre. Perhaps sign up for a composistion class at a local University or even private lessons. What I heard in your piece was the idea for a composistion, but not the knowledge to take it very far. But this is the way to start... so go for it! I would love to hear what you are doing after a year of study :) Aloha ... brad Check out my latest song called I'm Back!! Santa Espina
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| stevel said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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nice lyrical piece I would leave this up for a while if I were you, its probably just got missed in the stampede of posted songs. I too am not much of a Classical music expert...but this sounds very nice, it has a rather foreboding feel which I like. Maybe you should call it 'The waiting game'? S Check out my latest song called Electricity
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| mikkinylund said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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It's very... ...cold is my first feeling. Not in a bad way, but I get an image of winter, ice, wind... Someone in danger, perhaps walking on thin ice... Very nice piece, I like the fact that is this short too, it makes it even more dramatic. Good work. Mikki Check out my latest song called Hold
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| Pie said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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nice piece... ... kinda like a prelude to something... that could be a title LOL expand on this... nice stuff Pie Check out my latest song called Kaleidoscope (Single)
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| country john said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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some thoughts on the titles of classical compositions . . . unlike lyrical songs with a narrative . . . where you can just pick a line of the song for the title . . . it's often hard to 'theme' a piece of classical music . . . in order to find an appropriate title . . . the only thing you've got to act upon is the 'feel' of the music . . . which either falls into a sombre/melancholy camp . . . or the awe-inspiring/uplifting camp . . . but the beauty of an instrumental piece is that you can juxtapose these feelings with a 'loaded' title . . . to let the listener truly 'imagine' what the music means ! i personally like "00033" . . . i'm thinking of the piece as a kind of acoustic identity card for citizen 00033 . . . i think it's an incredibly moving piece of music . . . more-so due to it's brief time line . . . and you should definitely NOT remove it . . . safe country john™ Check out my latest song called atom bomb
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| thetiler said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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stirring Nice job, like the sound, very somber and to Quite nicely done I think. Thanks for sharing Check out my latest song called The Bluebird Cafe (with two other guest)
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| drakonis said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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Simple, short Hi Core, MacJams has been flooded with new talent lately, and it is hard to listen to all the new songs out there... heck, even my stuff is not commented on much anymore. Don't give up, don't whine, just participate, make yourself seen and heard, and others will come and say hi. :-) Hi! As far as this piece goes, it is simple and short, but a good starting point to make a richer piece from. The cello sounded nice and real, the strings were a little synth-ish. The song was a little repetitive. But it was somber and rather interesting. Maybe try inserting a different melody (and faster tempo) in the middle, then return to the somber melody for the ending. Just some ideas... ttfn, Drakonis Check out my latest song called Temporal Tantrum (Sister Savage Mix)
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| core said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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Wow... That's the strangest thing I ever experienced on this site. For six days nothing happens. No comment, no vote for this song. Then in a single day, it gets eight comments and two votes! Great thing... So I'm revising my decision, I won't take it down. Thanks a lot for all the comments and encouraging words. There were a few things that actually hit straight on what I felt too, but couldn't put my finger on... So thank you, I'll work on this a little more and eventually upload a new version. Check out my latest song called Skeleton
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| ThatNation said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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a new direction in my several months of experience at macjams, I have yet to hear many classical pieces. This is a great try at something good. Classical is not really my thing but you did a pretty good job with this thing. Check out my latest song called Performance Anxiety
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| TennesseeVic said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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Ok. Here goes. You use "real" instruments, and people know what they sound like. So you'll have to adapt your playing and writing technique. For instance, that first cello line should really end a phrase after the first 4 notes. A real player would never play it this way. Then, you start with a cello, then 2nd and first violin. Somewhere halfway I'm pretty sure you briefly have 4 voices, but most of the time you have 2 or 3. This is very unusual. There are almost no works for 3 solo strings -- typically you have a string quartet -- and orchestrally you have 1st and 2nd violin, viola, cello, bass. You can let the bass double the cello one octave below. My point is that a/ having only 3 voices is unrealistic b/ the way one voice keeps dropping out and coming back is compositionally meaningless. At a couple of places where you have only 2 voices, the harmonies sound "empty". In western harmony from 1600 onwards (or thereabouts) music is really based on having 3rds and 6ths. You can not go very long without having a clear major/minor harmony established. Some of your lines are very awkward in that respect. You are starting with one instrument, then the next, then another. That makes the listener expect something like a fugue, or in any case something with a clear relation between the parts. I don't hear what the second part has to do with the first, in terms of themes. Ok, after all this negativity let me say something nice. You're writing good melodic motifs, and the ensemble writing is very nice in places. You're just a bit uneducated in classical writing, but you can learn that. Pick up some books about classical harmony and contrapunctal writing, and do the exercises. To summarize. This piece in all sorts of places "sound just like" something I know, and I've been critiquing it as such. Here are a couple of pieces that are like yours that you can listen to. Listen to the slow (first?) movement of Bartok's "Music for string instruments, percussion, and celesta". That is a good fugue for strings. Also the slow movement (3rd?) from Charles Ives' 4th symphony. Finally, when I said that your middle voice dropping out was "meaningless" I was thinking of the first movement of Bach's concerto for 2 violins and orchestra. That is a fugue-like movement, with 1st and 2nd violin (and viola? I don't remember). The crucial bit is that the low voices (plus harpsichord) have been playing from the beginning (because it's a symphonic movement, rather than a real fugue), so when they need to play the fugue theme Bach has them drop out for a couple of measures. In the listener that gives an expectation of "Wow. What's going to happen when they come back?". And when those voices come back in, that's just about one of my favourite moments in all of classical music. Man! I do ramble on, don't I? Check out my latest song called Tecmo Superbowl 2009 w/ Dead End (MJRF 2004)
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| eleveneyes said 1632 days ago (May 22nd, 2005) | |
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i hate reading screen plays listening to string pieces on midi instrudments is like reading a screen play to me. i get the overall idea but it never really moves me until i see it acted out. I would love to hear this played with live musicians. this piece has some fugue type attributes but is it? i don't know, but i would agree with T-Vic regarding his Bartok selection - one of my favs! thanks for posting, enjoyed. Check out my latest song called Here With You - Better MIX
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| alley-oop said 1631 days ago (May 23rd, 2005) | |
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The last swan Is the name I'd call your piece (very nice by the way) I like mikkinylund's cold, icy imagery for the song, but Iwould also add: A beautiful swan swimming in small circles in a little open part of a frozen pond. The open spot keeps freezing more and more. The rest of the flock has flown away. This swan is the only one left. A metaphor for your feelings about pulling this beautiful little peice of music before your time runs out ( ice freezes over) Don't pull it, man. Don't give up. Check out my latest song called anymore
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| Anonymous said 1631 days ago (May 23rd, 2005) | |
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good potential core, i am truly sorry to miss this piece until now! ... thank you for posting on forums ... you have good ear for this kind of music ... tennessee vic writes many helpful comments ... now i add mine ... classical music needs a theme or "hook" like most kinds of music do ... this piece is like fugue ... is better to have shorter theme, then imitate, then introduce new distinct theme ... with different texture perhaps ... the texture here is pretty much the same ... would be more interesting if you vary it ... give more space ... perhaps shorten this piece into introduction to fast section ... (your final chord begs for a continuation) ... much like music of Vivaldi or Bach ... you have nice concept of string sound ... keep working on this idea ... you possess good ear ... GOOD LUCK with this and with all your music! ... |
| _nderscore said 1614 days ago (June 9th, 2005) | |
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prologue 00033 glad to see that you're keeping this posted. i'm one of the people who listened & DL'd early, but didn't have time to comment & vote-sorry. you need patience around here sometimes, but keep the faith anyway, i agree with pie in the sense that this acts well as a prelude to something further-mostly because of its brevity. holding that last note another second or so would really play up this idea. this could easily set up a non- classical song on your album, especially if you repeated some of the melodies in the follow up song i like '00033', too. mostly because this IS a classically styled song written/performed in 2005. the numbers add a level of mystery & possible dialogue about its meaning Check out my latest song called glyd
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| Monkaton said 1118 days ago (October 19th, 2006) | |
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Downloads There were 14 downloads out of 95 plays. I would say you were doing something that people liked enough to take home with them. Check out my latest song called Darkness of the Night
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core
I'm not a fan of classifying music. Especially in modern
times, when crossing the lines of genres can open new
directions. In classic music however it helps to know what
type of piece you're listening to. It's a matter of placing it
in context, because you know Debussy lived in times of
Art Nouveau, which was a time of reformation in terms of
content, what story was told. No longer did the church
dictate what defined classical music.
In the case of this little piece I know too little about
classical music to be able to classify it. I can write it, and I
can hear some baroque elements in it, but I can not say is
it a fuge or a quintett for strings.
If you know more about classical music than I do and
know what it is, even better, if you can give it a name --
any input that helps me to learn more about classical
music is appreciated.