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| Doadars Uncle said 1397 days ago (January 11th, 2006) | |
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sad, indeed It was a difficult song to develop simply keeping it slightly twisted. The darkness of youth. Thanks for tuning in! --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag
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| virtualruffy said 1397 days ago (January 11th, 2006) | |
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music is good I like the sound of it and the general feeling of it. Especially nice at the 2/3 changeover. I think that section should be a lot longer I was definetly feeling that and wanting more. I would recommend shortening the first 2/3 and lengthening the the more intense part. Also the ending just cuts off. Vocals aren't bad but they don't have anything to work with. I like intense lyrics with a lot of meaning so simply saying a handful of words doesnt work at all for me. No offense but I can't even consider them lyrics. I'd rather it was without vocals than that. I'd recomend either losing the entire vocal track or writing expansive lyrics to convey the theme. I think its got a lot of potential but its not being realized. I banged out some lyrics below off your keywords keeping them vague enough since I have no real details beyond the keywords as to your theme. Use 'em hate 'em. Just trying to help. sad are my days sorry for the ways we said goodbye everything went wrong I didnt want to worry until I heard goodbye on with our lives I walk in empty steps without you I am blind Check out my latest song called no sanctuary
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| Doadars Uncle said 1397 days ago (January 11th, 2006) | |
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music is good Thanks for the comments virtualruffy! I get your comments on the lyrics. I was trying to see if I could express an effective message with single word lines. I could have worked harder on the phrasing. But it is an experiment. I may re-address it in the future. --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag
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| chikoppi said 1397 days ago (January 11th, 2006) | |
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Abstract The accoustic sounds good. I like the clarity and closeness of it, which has a very intimate vibe. I'd suggest adding just a little width to bring thhe listener closer, maybe panning just 10% R/L using a doubled track. The tone of the rythm electric guitar seems a little too dirty and over- effected to me for some reason. I think I was drawn in by the natural character of the accoustic and want to hear a bit more of the pick against the strings. The electric sort of pushes me away. I think you might consider some alternate effects on the vocals rather than the delay. A phasing chorus might contrast the vocals more strongly with the center panned accoustic and help to accentuate the dream-like atmosphere, especially given the sparseness of the lyrics. In a sense, because the song is brief I think the vocals need to be really impactful. I dig the emotion of the song and the abstract lyrical content. Cameron's description of a "drunken haze" is very apt. Lots of mood in a tight little package! Check out my latest song called Loop It or Lose It 9
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| Doadars Uncle said 1397 days ago (January 11th, 2006) | |
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Abstract chikoppi! Thanks for the comments! I noticed some production issues, too. I think I was lazy. But I forget that I can dupe the file, archive it and try it again without losing the original. --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag
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| Doadars Uncle said 1397 days ago (January 11th, 2006) | |
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SLOBBLES! Thanks! Once I looked into the wind. I nodded. The wind was making me nod! I've always loved that plant. I smiled until I found my watch not working, maybe it was working strangely. When I see the light, I will extend it. Perhaps it will go smoothly! --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag
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| Heightened said 759 days ago (October 11th, 2007) | |
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Sad A very cool and well done song!!! Heightened Check out my latest song called A Journey Through Starburst Galaxy M82
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| Doadars Uncle said 757 days ago (October 13th, 2007) | |
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Sad indeed I'm glad you enjoyed it! Doug Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag
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Cameron
Nice combination of percussion with your acoustic guitar.
The way this piece begins is interesting, with a loose, free-form rhythm. It sort of meanders along without a definite beat, which creates a mood of sadness. A little drunken haze, perhaps?
Then the guitar and drums kick in with a steadier beat, although that free-form feeling remains throughout the song. Some things are a bit of of synch, a little unsettling, but effective in its way of conveying sadness.
Your artwork perfectly fits the mood you have created on this song.