Gone (Collaboration with LWinston)

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This is a vocal re-recording and remixing of the original post. The first post was vocally not precise in certain areas and the vocal level was also a little too high, making it sounding raw and rushed.

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Lyrics

GONE
(Lyrics by Leon; Music by LWinston)

1
I don't know how you found
your way into my heart
Now I grieve that you found
your way out of my (hands/life)

2
Since the day you walked away
it's been hard to deal with the loss
Cause in the darkness all I see
is a vision of a love gone like a ghost

3
You're a miracle that always
made the dream come alive
You were the sun on a rainy day
When my skies are gray, you arrive

4
But since the moment you went away
my life seems all undone
And (it's hard/ it hurts) to realize
that the stars, the moon and the sun have all gone...

(Break)

5
You used to fill my world
with the promise of an endless bliss
But like all good things, it had to end
the days we were together I truly miss

(Repeat 1, 4)

(Bridge)
I don't know how to live
without you in my life
I'm like a desert without rain
Can you feel my pain?

(Repeat 5)

You're gone...
'cause you're gone...
baby, you're gone...

Song Stats

Hits: 1373
Comments: 14
Fans: 6
Plays: 168
Downloads: 67
Votes:
Uploaded: May 27, 2006 - 02:55:21 PM
Last Updated: Jul 23, 2006 - 07:17:37 PM Last Played: Sep 09, 2009 - 11:36:04 PM

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Keywords:

Gone (26), rhythm (23), blues (490), Lloyd (2), Winston (2), Leon (22)

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Comments

moorlandt	moorlandt said 1261 days ago (May 27th, 2006)
	Very groovy Wow, the vocals blend extremely harmonously with the music. Very neat and clean song. Although I think your voice is realy the star of the track, the underlying groove is extrordinary balanced and supporting. Good job guys! Walter Check out my latest song called boundaries

Leon

Leon said 1260 days ago (May 28th, 2006)

Very groovy
Thanks, Moorlandt. (Can't quite remember what your name is in the chat; was it
Walter?) I did try to make the mix a little smoother and refined the vocals to
make it less strained. LWinston's music was very challenging as this is my first
RnB attempt, and I thank you for thinking it was a very listenable song! I will
listen to your song and comment on it, too. From what I've heard so far, you are
a very skilled musician yourself and that makes your comments weigh even
more.

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.

Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

ziti	ziti said 1261 days ago (May 27th, 2006)
	yeah leon this is a nice tune, and you sing great!!...is this all loops?...really good use of them if that is the case....this sounds to me like a song that could be done by santana....with some guest singer...i could hear some nice electric leads in there.... nice work!!!! z i'd have voted high on this if i coulda!!!! z Check out my latest song called Stepping Down

Leon

Leon said 1260 days ago (May 28th, 2006)

yeah leon
Thanks, Ziti. Those comments coming from one of the most admired musicians
in this site are worth... let me, think..priceless. It's easy to heap praise on
somebody else's song, but if the praise comes from someone like you, it is
enough to make someone giddy. That praise (and your music, ofcourse) gave
me a Zitian experience!

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.

Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

Alannah	Alannah said 1261 days ago (May 27th, 2006)
	This has such a nice smooth vibe to it Ah Leon .... perfection perfection .... but you certainly do this one justice. Nice job on those high notes - your upper register comes across so cleanly (no singing from the throat for YOU !!!!) .... and just the right amount of emotion shining through ! Check out my latest song called I'm Drownin' - Smokey VW (feat Alannah) + Outtaorbit

Leon	Leon said 1260 days ago (May 28th, 2006)
	This has such a nice smooth vibe to it Awww, Alannah.. you always say the best things and you also mean it with honesty! Your frankness is quite admirable, especially if it's a positive thing! :) Thanks for your appreciation of my music. The admiration is definitely mutual! --- The lion roars, the eagle soars. Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

echoroom

echoroom said 1261 days ago (May 28th, 2006)

sunny sunday
Sitting listening to this, 9.04 a.m. on a warm sunday, this is just sublime.
A great vocal, and fantastic chilled out instrumentation - I love the vocal
harmonies when they drop in as well, and the acoustic fits in perfectly.
There are some lines here that, in other hands, could be cliched (desert
without rain), but you own them, man!

Lovely work.

Check out my latest song called Deeper (w/t Racerat)

Leon

Leon said 1259 days ago (May 29th, 2006)

sunny sunday
Thanks, Steve. You know, your comments always inspire me. I do not quite
have your lyrical depth, but it is great to hear that you can appreciate even my
little cliches. I did re-record this song because the first time I recorded this was
past midnight and my voice got a little tight. This newer version is lighter and
smoother and more soulful. I know that if it passes your scrutiny, I must have
done it right. :-)

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.

Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

Mcboy	Mcboy said 1257 days ago (June 1st, 2006)
	still a gorgeous track!........ Check out my latest song called Heros( aclarke/mcboy)

Morning Light	Morning Light said 1252 days ago (June 5th, 2006)
	Superb Collab!!! Smooth , nice beat, and your voices are great!! ;)NightBird Check out my latest song called To the Children

Leon

Leon said 1204 days ago (July 23rd, 2006)

Older version of "Gone" is gone.
The older version of this song has been deleted. It received 7 votes and a
rating of 8.57, which is more than I expected for a raw version of the
song.

It also had 5 fans and 26 downloads by the time I erased it from the face
of Macjams.

Thanks to those who appreciated and downloaded it,

Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

Leon

Leon said 1204 days ago (July 23rd, 2006)

Fans and Comments of previous version of "Gone"
I have deleted the old version of this song. I have copied and am re-
posting here the previous comments made about the earlier version of
this song.

There were 13 comments and 5 fans. Thanks, guys, for your helpful
and inspiring remarks.

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Fan List
Mcboy, Cydniko, ultravphunter, rschletty, LWinston,

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COMMENTS:

u cats
Authored by: Mcboy on Mon, 8 May 2006 06:30:52 -0500

have it going on.......leon ...funk on with u r bad
self...hehhehhe.....lwinston u have that ny funk thing down pat....much
potential here fellas......peace.....
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u cats
Authored by: Leon on Mon, 8 May 2006 18:44:58 -0500

Thanks, McBoy! It's a change of genre for me so I get to show the
smoother and bad ass side of me, too! Heheh! Thanks for your
quotable praise on our song!

Maybe, I can get you to play guitar on a song sometime? You are da
bomb, bad ass, kick-ass guitarist! :-) If my slang doesn't make sense,
remember I'm Filipino.. Ha-ha!

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.
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Leon!!!
Authored by: Cydniko on Mon, 8 May 2006 10:18:46 -0500

I had no freaken idea.... Dude!!! Me next... Wow! - That was quite the
performance, and as Mcboy suggest..., go on w/ yer bad assed selves!
Geesh - I have goose bumbs that dripped' the coolest looking puddle
on the floor - LW - Kicks it up for this - What a very nice composition
Mr LW - Oh so sweet, my man - Your work was the initial tingle for the
bumps - Man, that was good fellas - Very nice! - Dion
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Leon!!!
Authored by: Leon on Mon, 8 May 2006 18:54:16 -0500

Man, my day is complete... i got a comment from the great Cyd!

It takes great music to inspire me to sing well. Lloyd (LWinston)'s music
got me on the right groove easily and it was so good it almost felt like
there was only one way to sing this song.

Thanks so much, Cyd, for your effusive appreciation of this song. You
don't know how great you just made me feel! A collab with you should
not be very far away I hope. :-)

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.
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Good Groove
Authored by: jsacker on Mon, 8 May 2006 10:33:14 -0500

Good music arrangement that compliments the voice. Smooth voice
and smooth music. Very nice sound for the overall performance.
Sounds good. Good job and God Bless.
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Good Groove
Authored by: Leon on Mon, 8 May 2006 18:57:46 -0500

Thanks and welcome to Macjams! Thanks for your admiration of the
song. I did check your debut song and it sounded really good!

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.
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Well Leon ....
Authored by: Alannah on Mon, 8 May 2006 10:33:40 -0500

I'm gonna have to start calling you the "Prince of Pop" I think ..... your
voice almost had a Steve Perry sound to it in this one .... (I think it's in
the Woah Woah's) ... very nice production (as usual) .... I think soon you
can afford a plane ticket to my house to teach me how its done !
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Well Leon ....
Authored by: Leon on Mon, 8 May 2006 18:38:01 -0500

Allanah, you probably figured that I have a penchant for wearing
surgical masks and sequined gloves and that I was gonna have some
nose job soon and bleach my skin... so yes, I might be fittingly called
that :-) The comparison will stop there I hope. Hmmm, I wish I had his
millions of dollars though, so I can fly to your place and give you
tutorials on digital recording. Heheh! :D

As for Steve Perry...wow, thanks! You're the fourth one to tell me that.
In my previous songs, I do wail like him especially on the higher notes.
I'm not complaining. He has a more textured voice, though. I wish I had
his millions, too. LOL again!

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The lion roars, the eagle soars.
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Funky
Authored by: charliechen on Mon, 8 May 2006 18:50:10 -0500
Great beat and R&B soundbed.

Nice singing, as usual, Leon. I did find your vocals a little hot in the
mix. Especially with your full throated singing style, it did get a little
much for me in some places. If you were to re-record, may I suggest
you dropping the pitch by a coupld of keys and sing more comfortably
in your chest voice for the verses and then really belt the higher parts.
You sounded a flat and strained in some places. I loved the vocals at
the bridge. You're singing a little lower and more breathy there and the
sound was really sexy.

Pardon me for sounding overly critical. I really like this song and would
love to see it even more polished.

Lyrically, there are some cliches but then who cares. It's interesting
considering the recent forum post about this. I agree with you opinion
that cliches will exist and it's all about the execution and delivery. But, I
would like to see you tidy up the lyrics with more consisten rhymes.
They rhyming scheme comes and goes and I think this song needs the
rhymes to anchor the words/phrases and provide structure &
emphasis.

With a little tweaking, this could be first class.

Well done.
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Funky
Authored by: Leon on Mon, 8 May 2006 19:55:25 -0500
Hi, Charlie. Thanks so much for taking time to listen and comment on
the
song.

I do appreciate your honest observation, but I will respectfully differ
with you when it comes to the vocals, about how to sing and what to
do and not to do. I am totally comfortable with the pitch of this song
and I sang it in the way I thought would be most expressive and
consistent with the theme. Personally, unless an artist's performance is
verging on outrageous or annoying, I stay away from critiquing a
person's voice and style. Think Macy Gray and Alannis Morisette and
Eminem, great artists who sing quirky and different but manage to
sound unique and interesting. They have fans who think they shouldn't
change their singing style as it is what defines them.

Your style and voice defines you, and it will be an affront for anyone to
even suggest that you should sing it in another person's way. Also, if
you notice, this song is entirely in a minor key, so your suggestion to
sing it in a lower key and mellow voice through most of the song will
make it sound monotonous, I think. In conclusion, this is my singing
style and I don't think I will change it for one man's opinion. I will
wholeheartedly agree, though, that you are entitled to your opinion
and I will not try to convince you
otherwise. :-)

I do agree with the cliches in this song. Everything has been said about
cliches and I am "guilty" of them occasionally, and in this song,
probably frequently. I hate cliches but sometimes there is not much
choice when you sing about love songs and pain and heartbreak. Also,
rhyme is what we all want to achieve, but I also recognize that it is not
always possible and that it is not the only way to write a good phrase.
Some of the best songs in this site are without rhyme and classic
structure. I will not sacrifice theme and substance if only to get a good
rhyme, although you can tell that I did give it
some effort. My final thought: I agree with you for the most part, but
being restricted in a box is boring. I believe in breaking rules once in a
while, and so do most innovative artists here. That may not appeal to
you, but it's all about taste and again I respect your own choices.

Thanks for your insight. We all learn from each other and your critique
is much appreciated.

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.
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Nice collaboration
Authored by: TobinMueller on Tue, 9 May 2006 04:55:31 -0500

Leon, nice track, this may be my favorite of yours so far. I like the
lightness of you voice, the chosen key (altho I can imagine key changes
that ratchet up the emotions as the song progresses, which might be
cool to play with), and the vocal level. I really like the opening organ
sound, the guitar solo moment (so perfectly placed!), and some of the
backing vocal details, altho the talking (subliminal?) was little more
than an effect and maybe didn't need to be used as much as the song
progressed. I have to profess a slight bias against modern R&B
stylings that involves so many vocal ornamentations that melody is
lost, usually placed on a song with almost no melody to begin with, but
you avoid this by not going overboard, and by utilizing an old school
melody that gave the song a solid grounding.

My biggest critique is that there are moments you aren't as exacting
pitch-wise as my ears want. Consider the last time you sing "..we were
together, I truly need..." When using R&B ornamentation, it is easy to
give a sense of not-in-compelte-control unless high notes are nailed,
and my ears thought you missed this last bit. Also, even tho I really
like the details of this arrangement, there is not a sense of build and
big finish (I know, maybe a showtune bias) that could have happened.
The track is almost radio ready. I really like the funkier potential of this
track. Very nice collaboration!
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Nice collaboration
Authored by: Leon on Tue, 9 May 2006 07:21:56 -0500

I totally agree with you and charliechen on that last phrase. I repeatedly
listened to this song (even before you posted this comment) and I am
not satisfied with that last line pitch-wise, like for some reason my
vocal cords fatigued a bit on those final notes. I was wanting to re-
record it but for some lazy reason didn't do it. If I remaster this, that is
the first thing I will do. There are other areas of the song that I might
want to refine, too. Also, true, I did not want to over-stylize on this
song as it robs the melody of its essential appeal: smooth and simple.

Regarding the build-up, I also agree with you. I was hoping to have a
chorus in the middle as a central hook, but there was none so I
resorted to making melody variations to make it more refreshing. This
is LWinston's composition so I was merely interpreting it. I hope he's
reading your comment, too.

Thanks, Tobin, for taking time to listen and critique this song.

---
The lion roars, the eagle soars.
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Pure
Authored by: rschletty on Thu, 11 May 2006 10:01:28 -0500

Everything is so clean and separated here. Wonderful depth of artform.
Great collab.
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Check out my latest song called The Nightingale (music and lyrics by Oceans)

racerat	racerat said 1053 days ago (December 22nd, 2006)
	smooth Now I can see that this rhythm and blues style is the genre your voice was made for. Smooth and silky. Great. --- -Philip Check out my latest song called Frank's Song

Moviz	Moviz said 904 days ago (May 19th, 2007)
	fantastic! This is great the backing sounds the vocals..... It's hypnotic. Great voice you've got there, M Check out my latest song called A Soldiers Dream (Remix/record)

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Name: Leon

I make music to balance the left and right sides of my brain. Arts and music have always been my area of strength, but unfortunately my day-to-day adult life now revolves around the mechanical rituals of science and the coldness of technology . I sti... [see more]

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