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| Willywagga said 1229 days ago (June 28th, 2006) | |
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I agree Thanks Moorlant, your comments are very appreciated, and I agree with your opinion on everything in fact. Yeah the guitar solo was just messing around at the last minute and really doesn't fit in at all, and yeah the bass and drums need variation. All to do. Thanks. Check out my latest song called The Jes on Sea Road
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| AquilA said 1229 days ago (June 28th, 2006) | |
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Cool Tune I really dug that. I'm thinking The Cars, and that's a good thing. I'm tapping my feet and bopping in my chair. As moorlandt said, the drums would benefit from some work, some accents and fills would spice them up. Maybe some heavier rhythm guitars in the later choruses to add a dynamic between the first and second half. I like your vocals and the lyrics too. Overall, I really enjoyed that, it just mostly needs better production but you've already got a really good song to start with. Check out my latest song called Bounce Buffet w/ Hectorious
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| Ed_Moran said 1228 days ago (June 29th, 2006) | |
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Good Work I really enjoyed the simplicity of the song. Vocals are great also like the backing vocals. Solo needs to be cleaned up back a little extra work this will be a great song. Ed Check out my latest song called Cowboy (WIP)
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| Ed_Moran said 1228 days ago (June 29th, 2006) | |
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Good Work I really enjoyed the simplicity of the song. Vocals are great also like the backing vocals. Solo needs to be cleaned up back a little extra work this will be a great song. Ed Check out my latest song called Cowboy (WIP)
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| Ed_Moran said 1228 days ago (June 29th, 2006) | |
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Good Work I really enjoyed the simplicity of the song. Vocals are great also like the backing vocals. Solo needs to be cleaned up back a little extra work this will be a great song. Ed Check out my latest song called Cowboy (WIP)
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| Ed_Moran said 1228 days ago (June 29th, 2006) | |
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Good Work I really enjoyed the simplicity of the song. Vocals are great also like the backing vocals. Solo needs to be cleaned up back a little extra work this will be a great song. Ed Check out my latest song called Cowboy (WIP)
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| Ed_Moran said 1228 days ago (June 29th, 2006) | |
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Good Work I really enjoyed the simplicity of the song. Vocals are great also like the backing vocals. Solo needs to be cleaned up back a little extra work this will be a great song. Ed Check out my latest song called Cowboy (WIP)
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| Hectorious said 1228 days ago (June 29th, 2006) | |
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The K.I.S.S. Method Keep it simple stupid(kiss) This is what my first band teacher told me. He said this is the way to make a great straight to the point song. Great tune man. I enjoyed it a lot. Check out my latest song called Short Circuit (Sample)
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| texas2tone said 1227 days ago (June 30th, 2006) | |
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Specific suggestions Ditto the previous comments concerning the level of the bass, the overall impression of the guitar solo. Now specifics: (1) Turn the initial guitar track (the first one we hear) into a "riff lead", with increased level in the beginning. This will establish your rhythm and more-or-less angry mood. Do not let this track degenerate into mere chording, but rather use it to provide (reasonably loud) riffing between your vocal verses/choruses. It should not be too hard to transform your current, bare-bones chording into an even bones-barer riff. (2) This suggestion is less important. Try adding a more aggressive backing vocal, or perhaps apply some distortion to the backing vocals. (3) A wacky idea: How about a vocal track that shouts something like, "Shot!" right after you say "oh oh o-oh" in the chorus? Just something to make the shooting sound at least mildly violent. (4) I would go for a major scale solo. Check out my latest song called Red
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| Willywagga said 1227 days ago (July 1st, 2006) | |
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Specific suggestions They're great suggestions Texas, I agree with most of what you say about the guitar sound, the lead is poxy (drunk) more anger needed def. Am working on it. Thanks Check out my latest song called The Jes on Sea Road
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| conruane said 1224 days ago (July 4th, 2006) | |
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I like it a lot It's still a little rough, but I like it a lot. Great voice. Bye Con |
| jiguma said 1219 days ago (July 9th, 2006) | |
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Nice feel Nice feel - I can see why people have suggested various ways of improving this, but I think it sounds pretty good as is. Sure the bass could be bigger in the mix and the drums could be improved - ditto the solo. However there are bands making a good living with similar songs. I like the lyrics and your voice suits this well. Definitely a Cars feel. This could be remade into something quite special if you wanted to. Neil Check out my latest song called Under My Skin
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| craft said 1217 days ago (July 10th, 2006) | |
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pro really enjoyed the lyrics of the song. Vocals are great so as the backing vocals. This is a great song. Professional Check out my latest song called Blue Lights (feat. Spleenveil)
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| jie said 1213 days ago (July 14th, 2006) | |
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Shoot Nice basic idea I agree with most of other comments especially the one about backing vocal shouting SHOT good idea. Guitar solo sounds like me when im pissed tho,some say even when im sober.But definetely a song to keep. Cheery Check out my latest song called Gods Got HisPlans, Ive got mine
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| said 1199 days ago (July 28th, 2006) | |
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from the past Great sounds reminds me of u2's early stuff with cbgb's punk.Nice job ,but kind a mellow at times. |
| said 1199 days ago (July 28th, 2006) | |
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from the past Great sounds reminds me of u2's early stuff with cbgb's punk.Nice job ,but kind a mellow at times. |
| breezer said 1172 days ago (August 24th, 2006) | |
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If it ain't broke don't fix it! This song is great as it is. Very cool. Check out my latest song called Leapfrog
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| gregd said 1140 days ago (September 25th, 2006) | |
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The vocals . . . are damn fine. The instrumentation is simple and pleasing. There's nothing wrong with any of it, but the drums wouldn't lose anything to have some variation. The feel is nice late '70's punk. I likes. -g Check out my latest song called 08nov08
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| tsand19151 said 1110 days ago (October 25th, 2006) | |
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nice kinda retro feel. loving the guitars. beat is solid. catchy chorus rounds this out. this would make a kool video......nice job. Check out my latest song called Kool Hot Flashes
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| tsand19151 said 1110 days ago (October 25th, 2006) | |
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nice kinda retro feel. loving the guitars. beat is solid. catchy chorus rounds this out. this would make a kool video......nice job. Check out my latest song called Kool Hot Flashes
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| Gav said 951 days ago (April 2nd, 2007) | |
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Like this Kinda talking heads vocals I reckon. I like the melody and lyrics. The bass needs to have more umph and the drums need a little more variance. Its a good little tune. The chorus does it for me! Watch the elec guitar tuning - a bit off in parts - not much though. Check out my latest song called Understand
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| hooverfry said 238 days ago (March 16th, 2009) | |
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like it like the chorus lyrically. Dark happy, a bit shocking. simple is good. Check out my latest song called Walking On The Air
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moorlandt
This is really a great tune. Nice easy going chords and vocal melody. This could easily become a splendid tune with some work.
The drums are very monotone and a bit boring I must say. Put in a fatter basic drum and bring more variation to it. Some breaks might help as well. I also nearly hear the bass. Bring it up and put some rythm and picking in it. Also the guitars could use a lot more calories. Must admit that I'm not so impressed with the lead solo.
I do like the singing very much, especially in the chorus.
Once again, a very pleasing song basically, and certainly worthwile reworking. Hope you don't mind my honnest comments...
Cheers!
Walter