Mystic (Demo)

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This is a song ive just written and recorded earlier. it was done fairly quickly and i don't think its really finished yet so im submitting it as a demo.

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Lyrics

inside, crawling like bugs
skin tearing like paper doves down wrong
mystic eyes
to mysticise me

fallen down
dont pick me up dont carry me

CRAWLING
CRAWLING
INSIDE
MY SKIN LIKE BUGS
CRAWLING INSIDE

Fear of dying
fear and loathing

you've fallen down
cant pick you up, wont carry you
make it on your own terms

CRAWLING
CRAWLING
INSIDE
MY SKIN LIKE BUGS
CRAWLING INSIDE

Copyright LBizzle Music 2008

Song Stats

Hits: 575
Comments: 11
Fans: 4
Plays: 25
Downloads: 25
Votes: 3
Uploaded: May 07, 2008 - 04:25:34 PM
Last Updated: May 07, 2008 - 04:25:34 PM Last Played: Jun 25, 2009 - 08:39:28 PM

Song License

Creative Commons License:
Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike

Song Actions

Hardware:

MacBook Pro 2.4ghz 17"

Software:

Logic Pro, Acoustik Piano,

Comments

Feter	Feter said 551 days ago (May 7th, 2008)
	Mystic great structure built upon the piano ... very nicely singing .you can lay down the piano bit back ..I m enjoyin this ..wish the guitar get bit higher .thnx for sharin !! Check out my latest song called A Night With Feter feat'(Roxylee sloparts crissew johnwhitehead and Yamin AL Yamani )

obbster	obbster said 551 days ago (May 7th, 2008)
	Thanx Theres a lots in the mix im still working on. The piano is fairly high in the mix and i think i wanna reduce the reverb in the vocals as well. Thanks for your comments Check out my latest song called One Touch (feat. E. Crossan)

gail60	gail60 said 551 days ago (May 7th, 2008)
	somber song Demo? I think it's much better than that! This is really good. You have a great voice and I enjoyed listening to this alot. There may be a few parts that may need a teeny bit of polishing, but overall, Great job. I look forward to your completed version. Check out my latest song called Sweet September

obbster	obbster said 543 days ago (May 15th, 2008)
	Thanx Thanks a lot for your comments, its appreciated. Check out my latest song called One Touch (feat. E. Crossan)

lavalamp	lavalamp said 550 days ago (May 8th, 2008)
	Like the...... natural piano sound, although I'm sure it's keyboards. You should keep it kinda' like this, but have more instruments join in as it builds. Sort of a Cold Play feel. ya know. I like your stuff. Dave Check out my latest song called Googolplex Times Zero

Warren Smith

Warren Smith said 550 days ago (May 8th, 2008)

crawling along
I think you are off to a great start here with this moody song.

Lyrically, the crawling chorus is a powerful centerpiece. However, I think the general theme of crawling could be explored a bit further in the verses. Right now your thoughts are veering off in a lot of different directions. The song would be more dynamic with a unified theme.

The basic melody is solid and the soundtrack forcefully presents it. I would like to hear something step forward during the musical break - maybe that fuzz guitar - to play a bit of a lead against the melody.

Well - that's just my feedback - take it for what it's worth. I wouldn't make any suggestions if I didn't think it was a good start : >

Check out my latest song called Bells of St Augustine

obbster	obbster said 545 days ago (May 13th, 2008)
	Cool Thanks for your input and ideas. Im still working on the song and your ideas are very helpful. Check out my latest song called One Touch (feat. E. Crossan)

	said 548 days ago (May 10th, 2008)
	Mystic What a great voice you have and such a lovely song- In a sombre sort of Way. Very thought provoking. i think its Fantastic!!! Brilliant production. Thanks for sharing. I loved it and will dowload it also. Peace Dee

obbster	obbster said 545 days ago (May 13th, 2008)
	Thanx Thanks your comments. Glad you liked the song. Check out my latest song called One Touch (feat. E. Crossan)

Peter Bauckham	Peter Bauckham said 545 days ago (May 13th, 2008)
	This is a great song - I really enjoyed it - I'd agree that there is a bit too much reverb on the vocal but it didn't detract from excellence of the song. Peter Check out my latest song called All The Same (CBGB) (Last Chance Challenge)

obbster	obbster said 543 days ago (May 15th, 2008)
	Reverb Yeah the reverb is too much. I tend to make that mistake a lot. Thanks for your comments. Check out my latest song called One Touch (feat. E. Crossan)

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