Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

indigoblu

Genre: Indie Rock

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You can live only a few miles from where you were born, but can still never quite get back to where you really were.

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Lyrics

home in green
third from the top of the hill
Tennis shoes sway
while stray dogs bay
at a distant canine thrill

home in green
seven hundred due by the third
We'd pack up today
and move far away
If they only gave us the word

But I'd miss this place so bad
The only home I ever had
The blue sky's more like brown
But I never want to leave this town

Home in green
It sure could use some repair
The carpets are worn
the curtains are torn
and the walls are always drowsy and bare

Home in green
Has got a lot of stories to tell
I'm hearing the walls
and reading the halls
and falling down the memory well

And I miss those times so bad
The rarest(dearest?) times I ever had
the memories play and play
and I hope they never fade away

Been away for a long time
The faces have changed
Streets are renamed
some have remained
But not me

I am just passing through
to see if the lines on my face match the cracks in the pavement
am I on the right street? I must be, but all that I see is a space...
Parking for 200 cars

But I'd miss this place so bad
The only home I ever had
The blue sky's more like brown
But I never want to leave this town

And I miss those times so bad
The rarest(dearest?) times I ever had
the memories play and play
and I hope they never fade away

I am just passing through...

Song Stats

Hits: 348
Comments: 15
Fans: 4
Plays: 44
Downloads: 19
Votes: 0
Uploaded: Apr 15, 2009 - 11:16:44 AM
Last Updated: Apr 15, 2009 - 11:16:44 AM Last Played: Oct 27, 2009 - 12:49:11 PM

Song License

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Attribution-ShareAlike

Song Actions

Hardware:

Fender telecaster, AKG Perception 420

Software:

Logic Pro (w/MIDI drums), Guitar Rig 3

Comments

Char	Char said 208 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	Can't stop time. Inventive and evocative lyrics, nicely sung. Good song. Thanks. Check out my latest song called Do Any Thing

indigoblu	indigoblu said 208 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	thanks for the comment Thanks a lot for the comment, Char. I'd love to hear your opinions on some of my other songs. Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

tempie	tempie said 208 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	GREAT vocals McCartneyish. but in your own way. chorus change is just brilliant. thanks for the dl! Check out my latest song called Quick Hearted Boy (A Cowboy Ballad, with Funk)

indigoblu	indigoblu said 208 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	McCartneyish..? Either you're very liberal with your comments or I'm too hard on myself to take a compliment like that with a straight face. Either way, thanks. I'll be sure to listen to some of your stuff as well. Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

tempie	tempie said 207 days ago (April 16th, 2009)
	liberal comment McCartney puts his pants on like everybody else dude. your vox sound great on this tune. when they sound bad i'll tell you lol. Check out my latest song called Quick Hearted Boy (A Cowboy Ballad, with Funk)

I.G.M.	I.G.M. said 208 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	really like it a lot I would love to hear a more "clean", more structured version. idea is top notch! nice, interesting melody over a simple backing. I.G.M. Check out my latest song called I`m Gone

indigoblu	indigoblu said 208 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	Thanks for dropping a line... I'm working on a polished version. hopefully I'll be done soon. Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

Jim Bouchard

Jim Bouchard said 207 days ago (April 15th, 2009)

Nice tune
I think you are looking for some critical suggestions for your more polished version, and since that seems to be my specialty, I will offer some more criticism.
The vocal has a nice quality, but I think there's a touch too much reverb on the vocal. It sounds a bit hollow. I'm not sure if the double tracking serves this well, since I really like your voice but doubling it makes it a little diluted. Is that actually doubled singing or is it one sung vocal using a doubling delay?
It's very trebley and I think I'm missing some bass. It's sort of an AM radio sound. A lot of the instruments are competing with the vocals for space, like the cymbals, the distorted guitar. I think the panning choices might contribute to this. The vocals sound like they are mostly panned to the sides and the guitar is more in the middle/left and the drums are middle/right. Normally you'd center the vocals for more punch and spread the guitars and drums more to the side. I don't know if you are using the stereo imaging effect in Logic, but that's a good way to make more space.
I think the drums are really nicely done but could be a bit louder. You might try a little bit of overdrive on the drums to give them more of an edge, and they'd fit into the guitar sound a bit better. And where's the bass?

Like I say, this is a great song and I think you've got a lot of great things going on here. It's pretty good as it is, to tell you the truth. And of course these ideas I have about the mix are only my personal opinion and take them for what they're worth.

Check out my latest song called Weather or Not w/awigze

indigoblu	indigoblu said 207 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	Thanks a lot for the tips... ... You certainly didn't have to do that, but it's much appreciated. i'll take them to heart, and I'll be sure to check out your music. Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

davisamerica	davisamerica said 207 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	man ... this is a rocker .... must check your catalogue! Check out my latest song called No Son(egobandit band)

indigoblu	indigoblu said 207 days ago (April 15th, 2009)
	Thanks a lot man... ... your words of encouragement are greatly welcomed. Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

blindsidedpoets	blindsidedpoets said 207 days ago (April 16th, 2009)
	Home In Green Do what you will for your final recording, but the song writing is solid, and that is a great place to start for whatever you are wanting to do with it. I like it, good job! Check out my latest song called Sorry (Bracelet of Hope Version)

indigoblu	indigoblu said 207 days ago (April 16th, 2009)
	reassuring... Thanks for the encouragement, man. i went against my usual songwriting procedure with this one. Normally, I get the tune down first, then struggle for lyrics. This time, I didn't worry about the music until I got the words down pat. I have to say i worked out good this time. Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

PaddyNavinCaryatid

PaddyNavinCaryatid said 207 days ago (April 16th, 2009)

Cracking song...
... especially the tempo change into the chorus. The big riffing is great. For a polish I'd lift everything up in the mix and go "wall of sound" with lashings of reverb - but then that's just me.
I'd also maybe go for a double vocal, with a lower register in there too - kind of Alice in Chains style. All of this I think would make an already great song simply wonderful.
Excellent work

Check out my latest song called The Last Goodbye (New Version)

indigoblu

indigoblu said 207 days ago (April 16th, 2009)

my plans...
...I really want to experiment with layering instruments as the song progresses. starting with basic 4 piece arrangement and gradually adding addition instruments, giving the final chorus run throughs an extra punch. You know, a real pay-off. I also wanna use my e-bow for something cool in this. Thanks for the suggestions, though. I'm all about "wall of sound' production. So maybe that'll find itself in the next iteration.

Check out my latest song called Home In Green (First Demo--RAW!!)

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