The Line (Revision 1)

Doadars Uncle

Genre: Progressive Rock

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The Line

I've been on the Line
all of the time
all of the time

I'm drinking beer
every year
every year

I'm alone
don't use the phone
don't use the phone

Jim's got my card
I'm workin' too hard
I'm workin'

Say goodbye to old Jim Larkin
when I'm gone
when I'm gone

Do it for me...

Song Stats

Hits: 1200
Comments: 10
Fans: 0
Plays: 84
Downloads: 89
Votes: 2
Uploaded: May 08, 2005 - 02:36:27 PM
Last Updated: May 10, 2005 - 05:27:47 PM Last Played: Feb 11, 2009 - 02:44:42 PM

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Song Actions

Hardware:

My old Fender acoustic, pencil, perc loops, piano loops, nondescript mic. Oh yes, my mac.

Software:

GB1, MidiKeys

Comments

	said 1643 days ago (May 10th, 2005)
	This is... awesum. The vocals are absolutely incredible! The chorus guitar compliments the mood perfectly. Hell yeah. My only critique would be to lose the piano loop and serve up a guitar bridge instead. Thx fer sharing this one.

	said 1643 days ago (May 10th, 2005)
	This is... oh...and a smoother fade out. Thx agian. --- MacJams...the global recording studio!

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1643 days ago (May 11th, 2005)
	This is... Great advice! I had thought about pulling piano for guitar. I'm going to let it simmer for a while and revisit it when the moment is right. I've got to clean my pallet. --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag

zendog said 1643 days ago (May 10th, 2005)

Still nice
I miss the electronic sounds featured high in the mix, but
I was a minority in that camp. Still like the contrasts
between the more electronic sound and the human sound
of the piano and the guitar.

The only thing I'd offer up is on the ending. There's this
Dire Straits song, On Any Street, that has a real slow vibe
for nearly the whole song and then just launches into this
really uptempo groove. Might be worth doing that with
this. Then again, it's perfectly fine the way it is. It has a
nice hopelessness to it.

Check out my latest song called Sold Out

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1643 days ago (May 11th, 2005)
	Still nice Thank you for the comments. I'll give it a listen. --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag

TennesseeVic	TennesseeVic said 1625 days ago (May 29th, 2005)
	I'm sorry, I can not listen to this. Please redo the vocals. What note is "line" in the first line? Or should that be "what notes"? Check out my latest song called Tecmo Superbowl 2009 w/ Dead End (MJRF 2004)

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1622 days ago (June 1st, 2005)
	I'm sorry, I can not listen to this. Respectfully, I was scooping, etc the note. I think I will redo the vocals to see how they can be played with. --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag

	audreycrews said 1571 days ago (July 22nd, 2005)
	mmmm (with a flared nostril) Ahhh.....Beeeer.....sound familiar?! Just kidding! I like this one too. I do like this version better than the first, fits my taste more....but you already knew that. I like the vocals, a nice change from the regular old vocals that we are all used to hearing day in and day out. It's nice to hear your voice (:

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1526 days ago (September 5th, 2005)
	mmmm (with a flared nostril) Thanks for the great comments! I am aprehensive when it comes to playing with my voice. I'm glad you like it! I haven't grown out of that beer thing. --- We have a cat and a fish. Our fish behaves very well... Check out my latest song called Capitalist's Drag

stooey	stooey said 950 days ago (April 3rd, 2007)
	I think I liked version one better. This still has the beeping, and I didn't like the piano solo. Perhaps a guitar solo instead as skipper suggested. Check out my latest song called Loop It Oldfieldlian

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Name: Doug CN

I appreciate original music. I've played guitar a bit for 30 years. Singing is fun! MacJams helps a lot! Good friends, good music. ... [see more]

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